Unlike Father, Unlike Son
By Jolah
“My name is Unoka. This must be a mistake. Please help me. Take me back to my home. Have you no mercy in your souls? I have done nothing wrong.”
“Nothing wrong? Shame on you! You are a disgrace to your village. You are lazy and wasteful. You are a debtor who owes many cowries. You have taken and sought no titles. You play the flute while others work and fight. You do not deserve to live. Umuofia is not a sanctuary for cowards.”
“I…I am not a coward.”
“Ha! If not a coward, then what are you?”
Unmoved, the men proceeded to kick his emaciated frame and left him to succumb to the harsh elements. Alone and dying from the ravages of his addictions, Unoka began to hallucinate. The whirling images in his head seemed as if he were viewing them through the lense of a kaleidoscope, continually changing focus in-and-out and from side-to-side. Not like the calming dreams produced when he would partake of gourds of palm wine and pinches of snuff, these were anxiety-provoking nightmares that challenged his soul.
Before Unoka could answer, the setting shifted once again. Okonkwo, his son, came running through the door of their obi, a satisfied grin plastered over his face having just defeated Amalinze the Cat in front of the adoring elders.
“I wish I could have seen him triumph over the Cat. He is much different from me, but that is his nature, and I respect our differences. If only he could respect my nature.”
Out of nowhere, Okonkwo’s grin transformed into a blood-thirsty glower as he lunged towards his father. Fangs sank deep into Unoka’s legs. Instantly, he returned back to consciousness, a hyena scratching his face and gnawing at his legs. Summoning the last ounce of his limited strength, Unoka fought back ineffectively. Blood dripped from the cuts on his face, his limbs quivered from exhaustion, and his skin burned in the oppressive heat as the hyena left him alone to die.
Bibliography
https://www.pinterest.com/bczerniewski/african-drums/ - a tradition Igbo drum called a kim kim
https://www.naij.com/949030-igbo-amaka-5-photos-will-make-fall-love-igbo-culture.html - a traditional Igbo flute called an Opi
https://www.igboguide.org/HT-chapter10.htm - Igbo Village
https://www.igboguide.org/HT-chapter9.htm - a masked Igbo god
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ikenga - statue of Ikenga the god of war
Justin, similar to Yale, I also enjoyed how you incorporated dialogue into your story, especially dialogue in the native language which helped give a greater effect to the story. I especially enjoyed your ending as the climax was directly before, an interesting choice as I wanted to continue reading. Great job overall!
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